Fade to Black
This week, Jason Warden, Aaron Conaway and I are each writing a flash based on the following photo prompt by the fabulous Icy Sedgwick.
FADE TO BLACK
Fog rolled in over the pier, pushed ashore by the coming night. The tiny island disappeared first, then the boats tethered in the harbor, until even the rail a few yards away was nothing but a misty memory. The damp air clung to his lips and throat leaving a salty residue on his tongue.
He’d arrived early, flowers in hand, muscles twitching with excitement, adrenaline drowning out his fear. His grin had garnered him a few odd looks from passersby, but he didn’t care. She was coming. That’s all that mattered.
The crowd thinned with no sign of her. He clutched his hope like a life line until he was the only one left, smothered in a blanket of fog, choking on the fear that he’d been made a fool. He dropped the flowers, anger bubbling over his hurt, when a hand gripped his. Cool fingers wove between his and he smiled.
“You came,” he whispered.
“I promised.”
His skin cooled against her icy touch.
“Are you ready?”
He nodded and released his final breath as they faded into the fog.
You can find the other stories here:
“Transparent Love” by Jason Warden
“Homesick” by Aaron Conaway
Awesome Danni. Oddly, we used similar verbage. I felt like I was reading an alternate version of my own and I liked it.
Wonderul Danni! Beautifully written, I love it. Thank you for sharing!
Lisa
Beautifully painted scene. And it was a treat to see three takes on the same photo.
Aw so glad my photo could inspire something as fabulous as this!
Evocative and wonderful picturesque, thanks dani another wonderful short piece of flash.
Wonderful, as usual! Amazingly well done, Danni
Fantastic imagery! I take back all the teasing from yesterday!
Well done!
Dare I say it? Great atmosphere!
“…leaving a salty residue on his tongue.” my fav. Lovely piece and the ending was very interesting, so many open idea there to explore. Nicely done!
This is absolutely breathtaking! Marvelous job
A really beautiful and evocative piece xxx
Excellent story! There’s something about fog that makes everything seem otherworldly, creep, and, well, neat. Glad it ended happy for them.
So much longing and release, packed into so few lines. A perfect flash.
Great job fitting all that in to so few words.
Wonderfully written. It read fast but there was so much there. I applaud you.
So few words used and yet so much said. Very impressed with this. Good work!
Touching end. I likes.
Perfect flash. Wonderful use of imagery.
Stacey
Pretty and tender, too. Really liked it!
Awesome, Mom! I loved it!
Thank you, mija. I love you, too!
Incredible, Danni! You painted the scene beautifully and then caught me off guard with the ending. I love it.
I’ll go with Fog Girl over the Democracy of Uneasy Stares any day.
Thank you all for stopping by and taking time to leave comments. You guys are all too awesome for words.
And thank you to the fabulous Icy for the awesome. Jason, Aaron and I had a great time sharing the prompt.
Very well done. Great imagery and atmosphere with a minimum of words. Very well done!
This has a supernatural feel to it. Can’t decide if she is real or something else. I like the antisipation, the hope, the instant of disappointment that is flipped and fullfilled.
You had me standing on the pier, in the Bay of Fundy, so long ago. I can smell the ocean. Well done.