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Moon Called

August 5, 2010

Photo Prompt by Sandy Morrison
A howl broke the silence of the night. Its call pricked her skin, tingles danced across her flesh and still she ran, panting with the effort to stay upright. Heart pounding out of control, her body ached with an unfamiliar need. The clouds shifted overhead, spilling moonlight across her path. She dodged the glow, dipping into the shadows as she ran.

The call came again. A muscle spasm sent her tumbling to the ground. Screaming, she fought for control of her body, but the beast was stronger. She knew she could never win. Exhausted, she gave in to the shift, the pain fading as her body took over, remolding itself.

Finally it stopped. She lay still, chest heaving, each breath bringing a flood of scents–earth, animals, plants, even the river a half mile South. Her mind raced to sort them out as the flavors played across her tongue. She blinked, taking in the world with her new eyes. Testing her new body, she rolled, and pushed herself up, his words echoing in her mind. She shook her head and caught sight of the unnatural shadow on the forest floor. Lifting a foot, she watched it react as her mind struggled to accept it.

Another howl, closer this time. Instinct lifted her face to the moon and she echoed the call. She choked back the end of the reply, refusing to succumb. Growling in frustration she knew he was wrong, this would never be okay.

She caught a new scent on the breeze, turning she saw him standing a few yards away. Despite the different form, she knew the look in his eyes and the sandy color of his hair. Her lip curled in a snarl. He dipped his head once and took a step towards her. A growl ripped from her throat and she lunged.

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38 Comments leave one →
  1. August 5, 2010 12:26 PM

    Very cool! A down and dirty werewolf story. Loved the descriptions of her transformation and what she experiences when transformed.

  2. August 5, 2010 12:35 PM

    Wow.. really great descriptions in your werewolf piece. Very well done. Were-creatures are a personal favorite.

    -Tim

  3. jax permalink
    August 5, 2010 12:45 PM

    Is this a tribute? Because it definitely brings a certain couple to mind. 😀
    Excellent as always. 🙂 If you ever want a beta reader, I’d love to read more of your work.

    • August 5, 2010 1:05 PM

      I have no idea what couple you’re referring to. LOL That might have had some influece. 😉 And I might just take you up on that offer next time I need something. Thanks!

  4. Ian permalink
    August 5, 2010 1:08 PM

    Well done. You capture so much in so small a span. I’m envious.

    Cheers,
    Ian

  5. August 5, 2010 1:10 PM

    As we say in Spanish: you left me with honey on the lips. Meaning: just when I was starting to enjoy the reading, it ends!
    Really great, as usual.

  6. August 5, 2010 3:49 PM

    Nicely done, great description. I love how she fights for control of her mind and body. Well done, as usual.

  7. August 5, 2010 3:56 PM

    Very nice, I love how she’s basically running from the change.

  8. August 5, 2010 3:57 PM

    Awesome. Did I say this was awesome? Because this is awesome.

    I love a good werewolf story, and this one is excellent. Like Eric said, down and dirty. No nonsense, no frills, just stunning writing and the pure self-conflict.

    “applause”

  9. August 5, 2010 4:10 PM

    You guys are so great! I was so nervous to post this week, unsure if it was up to par or not. Thank you so much for the support! 🙂

  10. August 5, 2010 4:13 PM

    Cool werewolf story. I like it that she’s pissed off about being made and is going to take revenge. A different twist to the werewolf tale. Nicely done!

  11. August 5, 2010 4:23 PM

    Great werewolf descriptions and feelings – they are people at the end of the day and feel the transformation – great style – i like a lot

  12. August 5, 2010 4:27 PM

    Excellent! Besides every one else’s comments, I love how she rejects the man/male and lurches at him. Quite an original ending. 🙂

  13. August 5, 2010 4:30 PM

    I have NEVER experienced a werewolf transformation from the point of view of the werewolf. Bloody brilliant.

  14. August 5, 2010 7:18 PM

    Great description of the shift. That’s what fascinates me most about werewolves — the way the body surrenders to something greater than itself. kind of like addiction. Peace…

  15. August 6, 2010 12:06 AM

    Women.

    What?

    Fine, I’ll be serious! It’s a pat story, Danni, but that’s not a bad thing. It’s earnest. Night, moon, werewolf, tension, bloodshed – there is nothing wrong with that story skeleton so long as you execute it well. By writing good prose and taking no pretensions about twists the tale totally worked.

    • August 6, 2010 7:16 AM

      Thanks, John. There are reasons I typically avoid vamp & werewolf stories, but this one just called to me. 😉

  16. August 6, 2010 3:57 AM

    This is another great one! Your description is really well done!

  17. digirar permalink
    August 6, 2010 4:15 AM

    Good stuff! I like the ambiguous ending. She could either be attacking or preparing to mate. At least that’s how I read it – am not too familiar with werewolf mating rituals 🙂

  18. August 6, 2010 4:28 AM

    I found this through the flash fiction tag, it’s a neat werewolf story and I like it 🙂

  19. Kelly permalink
    August 6, 2010 7:03 AM

    Fab story! I love werewolves!

  20. August 6, 2010 7:18 AM

    Excellent word painting. You gave me a very tactile sense of what she was going through. Her conscience fighting the wolf instincts was a nice bit. Very gritty and magnetic flash. Well done.

  21. August 6, 2010 8:26 AM

    Very nice, I do like a good werewolf story, and this was certainly one of those.

  22. August 6, 2010 8:41 AM

    I always look foward to reading your weekly flash pieces. They are so descriptive and visually entertaining. A very nice piece. You always seem to know what to write with a specific picture. Great read again.

  23. August 6, 2010 11:08 AM

    Great offering, a lot is done in a few line. Well done.

  24. August 6, 2010 3:18 PM

    You made the story so earthy and believable. Well told!

  25. Travis King permalink
    August 6, 2010 4:34 PM

    Hmmm…everything’s been said. I liked it. As always, you did a good job telling a story in so few words. I think it worked especially because there’s no gimmickry here but at the same time it is something of a different approach to the traditional werewolf story, especially at the end. Thanks for sharing despite your initial misgivings, Danielle.

  26. August 7, 2010 8:08 AM

    This is one cool were snippet. Enjoyed it!

  27. August 7, 2010 8:34 AM

    Great visuals in this story. I think that may be your strongest point as a writer! It gave me the chills.

  28. August 8, 2010 4:39 AM

    Lovely visuals, and I loved the feral ending.

  29. August 8, 2010 11:50 AM

    As others noted, the ending was great. It was the vivid descriptions, though, that really drew me into this story.

  30. Deanna Schrayer permalink
    August 9, 2010 6:07 AM

    As others have said Dani, the imagery here is outstanding! I don’t generally like werewolf stories, (or vampires, zombies, etc), but this is definitely an exception. I felt my heart racing throughout. Bravo!

  31. August 9, 2010 6:07 AM

    Ah, it’s good to see how you developed this idea! Nice to see the pain of transformation included – things like ‘Twilight’ make it seem a walk in the park to fundamentally alter the order of your anatomy. Good pacing, and nice descriptions.

  32. August 9, 2010 7:35 PM

    Great were-wolf story! I just wish it had been longer. 🙂

  33. August 9, 2010 8:07 PM

    Thank you guys for all the wonderful comments! It’s very much appreciated.

  34. Misty permalink
    October 21, 2010 1:05 PM

    Awesome! Did remind me of someone… 🙂

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