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Crystal Lake

August 13, 2010

Photo by Sandy Morrison
He stood on the shore staring out at the lake. A breeze whispered across the water, ripples of moonlight danced on its surface. He closed his eyes as the cool air breathed against his face, the scent of lingering campfires tickled his nose. Looking up at the broad-faced moon and glittering stars, he wondered why his life had come to this. Too young to lose so much, and for what?

Music and laughter echoed from nearby cabins, the sounds of ecstasy, youth, life. Who were they to live so free when he’d been denied so much? Anger pulsed through his veins in a wave of heat. He turned and marched into the woods, gliding from tree to tree, shadow to shadow, until he was close enough to see into the cabins, and waited.

Finally she came, stumbling and giggling, down the steps. “I just need some fresh air. It’s hot in there,” she called over her shoulder to a boy in the doorway. The boy was about to follow, but shouts from inside pulled his attention away. He hesitated, giving her one last glance over his shoulder, then disappeared into the cabin.

The time had come to claim his prize. Adrenaline coursed through his veins as he watched the boy retreat. Slipping the mask into place, he stepped away from the tree. Her eyes flew open at the sight of him, but before she could scream, he tightened his grip on the machete and swung.

In honor of a horror classic on this Friday the 13th.

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43 Comments leave one →
  1. August 13, 2010 5:15 AM

    Ewww, that was genuinely creepy Danni. It started out so normal, and then the ending was so horrific. Nice piece. Great pic to go with it. You’ve created a gruesome little Friday the 13th story.

  2. Kelly permalink
    August 13, 2010 5:32 AM

    I love Friday the 13th. Even got married on one. Terrific tribute to a classic!

  3. Ian permalink
    August 13, 2010 7:13 AM

    Yikes! The 13th brings out the horror in you – and that’s a good thing. Nice job.

  4. August 13, 2010 7:13 AM

    This is why I always stay inside the cabin at night! Great spooky/scary story, especially since it began so serenely.

  5. August 13, 2010 7:38 AM

    Great, desciptive story that just hints at his troubled mind and the horror to come. Well done!

  6. August 13, 2010 7:40 AM

    A quiet lake and a dark night… they can become very scary together.
    :S

  7. August 13, 2010 7:42 AM

    A perfect tribute to Friday the 13th. Cool story!

  8. jax permalink
    August 13, 2010 8:23 AM

    I love the hints of things, rather than graphic details. It lets my mind make up its own horrors. You give me the heebie jeebies in the best way. 😀

  9. Deanna Schrayer permalink
    August 13, 2010 8:26 AM

    Gulp – where did my breath go?! This is so well written Dani. You portrayed an awful lot of vivid imagery in such a short space. Bravo!

  10. August 13, 2010 9:44 AM

    A great twist on the Vorhee’s mythos. Interesting to see it from Jason’s POV for once. Thanks Danielle.

  11. August 13, 2010 10:03 AM

    Jason is my hero. Thanks for giving him a pat on the back and a swing of the arm.

    • August 13, 2010 10:08 AM

      You’re welcome and um…remind me to never go camping with you, John. 🙂

  12. August 13, 2010 10:11 AM

    Thanks for the great comments everyone. I really appreciate it.

  13. August 13, 2010 10:37 AM

    So, yeah… remind me never to go camping with John either. Nice take on the story. Why is it that the girl can never just stay inside?

  14. August 13, 2010 10:44 AM

    Was wondering where the story was going and then BAM! I had to read it again. Best tribute ever. Well done! : )

  15. August 13, 2010 10:46 AM

    I would have enjoyed the Friday the 13th series much more if they’d been this elegantly and suggestively written. This is so much better.

    Great scary story. Love it.

  16. Michelle Muto permalink
    August 13, 2010 12:38 PM

    Ah! Friday the 13th… I wonder how many people will pop in the old VCR or if they’ve got it on DVD.

    Good short Danni!

  17. August 13, 2010 1:26 PM

    You captured the creepy day perfectly! Well done! Friday the 13th is my husband’s favorite series of horror flicks. I’ve watched all of them several times with him and we laugh at all of the silly mistakes and continuity errors that we find!

  18. August 13, 2010 1:35 PM

    Nice nod to a classic slasher story. This is much more elequent than the original.

  19. August 13, 2010 3:10 PM

    Scary and very well-written! Thanks for sharing, Danni. 😀

    And… Happy Friday the 13th? Is it appropriate to say that? I can never decide. 😉 Haha.

  20. August 13, 2010 6:59 PM

    Great tribute. Initially I thought it was about suicide. Loved the twist 🙂

  21. August 14, 2010 8:45 AM

    Nice piece of fanfic here. Those Friday the 13th stories always creep me out. *shivering” Well done!

  22. August 14, 2010 9:19 AM

    I’d be interested to see what else you’d do with Jason! Very eerie beginning, then straight on with the action. Bravo!

  23. August 14, 2010 1:45 PM

    Yikes! It’s Friday the 13th, and I never even saw the movie. Now I don’t even have to. Creepy guy, and a well crafted creepy tale.
    ~jon

  24. Carlos R. Looney permalink
    August 14, 2010 11:03 PM

    Jason always scares me!!! Won’t be able to sleep now!!! LOL Great story, great scenery and great perspective!!!

  25. Mikey permalink
    August 15, 2010 12:23 PM

    Nice job! I better not let the kids read this one. Is your last name King? hehehehehe

  26. August 15, 2010 5:51 PM

    Tight, taut — horror at its best. Really sharp story. Peace…

  27. Travis King permalink
    August 16, 2010 11:43 AM

    Nice tribute. The film would have been much more interesting if it had contained the depth of character you portray here. Good job!

  28. August 16, 2010 12:43 PM

    Very cool. Neat to see it from Jason’s POV.

  29. August 16, 2010 9:03 PM

    A glimpse into the mind of a killer. Wow.

  30. August 18, 2010 12:18 PM

    I love this! Always good to see into a mind of a killer. And Jason is the best. 🙂

  31. August 18, 2010 6:56 PM

    I love it when those bubbly babes get bludgeoned.

  32. Misty permalink
    October 21, 2010 1:01 PM

    Masks creep me out sooooo bad. Great writing, but I’ll be calling you when I finish all of these and have nightmares. lol

  33. December 23, 2010 8:01 AM

    OMG!! YES!!! I freaking LOVE this. That is Jason…yes…born out of neglect and loss and hate and revenge.

  34. May 12, 2011 10:31 PM

    so so good. If Chris wasn’t out of town, I would happily Netflix the whole set… I better not.
    Happy 13th!
    ~2

  35. May 13, 2011 3:46 AM

    Ohhh 2Mara, home alone? *heads to party store for a mask* 🙂

  36. May 13, 2011 1:27 PM

    creepy! and perfect for friday the 13th.

  37. May 13, 2011 5:06 PM

    I luvs a creepy tale. Mwuuaahaahahaaa!

  38. January 13, 2012 10:33 AM

    Now that’s some classic horror. Loved it.

  39. January 13, 2012 11:05 AM

    Moody, evocative, and extremely intense for your average hair dresser…

  40. January 13, 2012 11:50 AM

    Nice to see this back again.

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