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October 7, 2010

This story is part of my series on the Seven Deadly Sins.
Also posted: Wrath, Greed, Lust, Sloth, Envy, Gluttony

Photo Prompt by Ian O’Neill
According to the Greeks, to Dante, and to scholars, Pride is the root of all sin. It leads us to covet what is not ours: Envy, Greed. It blinds us into apathy towards the pain of others: Sloth. It corrupts our desires: Lust, Gluttony. And when we can’t fulfill those wants that burn into needs, it fuels a fire in our gut: Wrath.

Pride is identified as a desire to be more important or attractive than others (Greed, Envy, Lust), failing to acknowledge the good work of others (Sloth), and excessive love of self (Gluttony). Dante’s definition was “love of self perverted to hatred and contempt for one’s neighbor.”(Wrath)*

I started this series with the story of Cain and Able, the first tale of Wrath which stemmed from Pride, Greed, and Envy. I close this series with an infamous tale of the ultimate corruption of Pride.

He stared across a sea of faces- brothers and sisters. He knew each one by name. Satisfaction coursed through him at the sheer number before him. Their expectant eyes fed his courage. His heart raced, his muscles twitched with a new energy. Power.

The time had come to raise their collective voices to the heavens and demand what was rightfully theirs. And he would lead them all. He smiled and stepped forward. The murmurs faded as he lifted his hands.

All eyes focused on him.

“I never believed this day would come. The day we would be forced to rise up and say no. The day we would refuse to bow down. He commands us to kneel before the weakness of men. Men made of clay. Mortals who return to the dust. Who are they to be worshiped by us? What right do they have to command the will of those created by fire?”
Their eyes lit up; energy pulsed through the crowd, feeding his message.

“We who were forged in the flames of heaven will not bow down! I will rise up like the Most High and I will lead you to victory!”

Their voices rose in a chorus of cheers as they raced into battle.

Sword to sword. Hand to hand. Brother to brother.

The warriors surged, wave after wave came against the rebels forcing them beyond the gates, banishing them to the depths of the earth.

Eyes blazing, he raised a fist to the heavens. “I will never bow down to you or your creations. I will roam this wasteland corrupting every soul I touch. I will take every one of them with the heat of passion and rage. I will twist their desires and curse the very food that sustains them. I will steal their joy, their compassion. And they will beg me for more. I will feed them power until they rot. They will suffer the flames of hell and I will reign. I will be worshiped. I will be God!”

This story won the ShadowCast Audio #fridayflash Deathmatch for the week of November 15, 2010. Thanks to all who voted!

37 Comments leave one →
  1. Shadow permalink
    October 7, 2010 12:25 PM

    Very nice.

  2. Mikey permalink
    October 7, 2010 12:30 PM

    Amen sister! The father of all lies who prowls around like a roaring lion searching for someone to devour. Nice job.

  3. October 7, 2010 12:32 PM

    *Standing ovation*

    Perfect end to a superb series. Lucifer’s voice is strong and charismatic. Made my hair stand on end.

    So. When’s this series going to be published? I’m serious.


  4. Deanna Schrayer permalink
    October 7, 2010 12:37 PM

    Very powerful Danielle. I’ve really enjoyed this series.

  5. October 7, 2010 12:56 PM

    *leans back, sated* This was a wonderful last course to a delightful repast of fics.

  6. October 7, 2010 1:08 PM

    Well done 🙂 This is the perfect way to end your series 🙂

  7. October 7, 2010 1:12 PM

    Awesome, I missed a couple of the series, but I’ll be catching up of the weekend. xx

  8. Kelly permalink
    October 7, 2010 1:16 PM

    Way powerful. You could really sense the passion in his words, that he honestly believed in what he was saying. Pride goeth before the fall. *bows to the master* You rock!

  9. October 7, 2010 1:22 PM

    Wow! Stunning imagery. Again you killed this one. Love it!

  10. October 7, 2010 1:51 PM

    A powerful and passionate finale to this series. Lovely!

  11. October 7, 2010 2:29 PM

    Very passionate writing!

  12. Ian permalink
    October 7, 2010 2:33 PM

    Another great piece that made me feel uncomfortable. Well done.


  13. October 7, 2010 4:10 PM

    Thanks for making the goosebumps stand up all over my legs THAT I JUST SHAVED. I don’t even know what to say. It’s perfect.

  14. October 7, 2010 4:15 PM

    Somehow knew it would come back to this fella. Sort of a circle story. You gave him a good, pompous sermon, too.

  15. October 7, 2010 4:28 PM

    Thank you all for the fantastic comments. I was a little nervous about undertaking my first series, but your support has been incredible. Thank you for checking in every week and staying up on the stories. I’m blessed to have such amazing writing friends.

  16. October 8, 2010 6:13 AM

    Ah, you’ve saved the best for last – and don’t forget, they do say pride comes before a fall, and no one knows how to Fall quite like Lucifer.

  17. Misty permalink
    October 8, 2010 7:04 AM

    Amazing again, sis! You really blew us all away with this series! I’m so proud of you! Get it published now. 🙂

  18. October 8, 2010 7:46 AM

    That one gave me chills. A wonderful series and so descriptive and vivid. I loved every one of them. This was a brilliant ending to your set. Thanks for sharing these. They’re all great! 🙂

  19. October 8, 2010 8:24 AM

    Powerful imagery, great description, a gripping scene. You summed up Pride very well. Good job!

  20. Michelle permalink
    October 8, 2010 8:26 AM

    A great end to the series! Well done!

  21. October 8, 2010 8:39 AM

    Ah, Lucifer. Perfect encapsulation of pride, which indeed goeth before the fall.

  22. October 8, 2010 9:07 AM

    Self-justification, carried to its ultimate end. Nice.

  23. October 8, 2010 10:49 AM

    Stunning finale. I really enjoyed this series, and the last piece was very satisfying.

  24. October 8, 2010 11:18 AM

    FABULOUS!!!! God as pride.

    But… I wish we had more deadly sins because I am really, really going to miss these. Peace…

  25. October 8, 2010 11:50 AM

    Great wrap up story to an excellent series.

  26. itallmeanssomething permalink
    October 8, 2010 1:20 PM

    Yep. I think that is just what he sounds like and exactly what he believes. Loved the crush of the crowd and war in the air. I could feel it.

  27. October 8, 2010 3:33 PM

    Very nice! Amazing detail! Well done!

  28. adampb permalink
    October 8, 2010 7:41 PM

    This has been a fantastic series. A spectacular and appropriate way to end it.
    Adam B @revhappiness

  29. October 8, 2010 11:21 PM

    Perfect person to use to personify pride. A great addition to your series.

  30. October 9, 2010 1:49 PM

    Another great bit of fun from you Danielle. Wonder what you’ll be tackling next.

  31. October 9, 2010 2:32 PM

    Excellent way to end the series!

  32. October 9, 2010 4:42 PM

    “I will be God!”

    Powerful last line! And a great ending to the series. 🙂

  33. October 10, 2010 7:36 AM

    Oh you gave me chills. Very good, indeed 🙂

  34. October 10, 2010 7:37 PM

    and so Lucifer Fell…

  35. October 10, 2010 7:45 PM

    So he fell, hard and fast… and so many with him.


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