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The Storm

September 22, 2011

Thunder rolled across the sky as the first drops fell softly against the desert floor. The clouds darkened and the wind whipped sand across his face.

He pulled the jacket tighter and leaned into the gusts. The chill in the air was nothing compared to the ice in her eyes and the poison in her words.

The patter of rain tapped out a song, matching the rhythm of his boots on the highway. He marched on into the storm. And away from her.

This week’s flash was inspired by a prompt posted on Easily Mused. The following six words had to be included in the story: thunder, softly, poison, boots, highway, ice

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  1. September 22, 2011 8:11 AM

    You’re back with a vengeance, Danni – simply beautiful:)

  2. September 22, 2011 8:42 AM

    Another amazing and gripping piece. x

  3. September 22, 2011 11:07 AM

    Danni, you’re good. A story, but poetic? I think you may have managed it…

  4. September 22, 2011 11:46 AM

    Fabulous flash! You’re a wonderful writer!

  5. September 22, 2011 11:50 AM

    Nicely done. Wonderful imagery as well.

  6. September 22, 2011 12:38 PM

    A great visual Danni! I love the way you put words together. They always tell a story no matter how short your flash is. Great stuff!! πŸ™‚

  7. September 22, 2011 2:53 PM

    That’s pretty! Really like the imagery. Poor guy.

  8. diannewaye permalink
    September 22, 2011 5:41 PM

    Wow – that’s a whole lot of story crammed into a few choice words. Awesome challenge – well done!

  9. September 22, 2011 6:52 PM

    Such striking emotion in such a short piece. Well done. I think I’ll go read it again.

  10. September 22, 2011 7:07 PM

    Very nice descriptive writing Danni that held my attention from beginning to end.

  11. PENNY permalink
    September 22, 2011 8:34 PM

    SWEET!!

  12. September 22, 2011 8:45 PM

    My gosh this one got popular on a Thursday evening! I feel so late and it’s not even really Friday yet. It’s a lovely setting-heavy piece, Danni, one to be proud of. I can’t blame you for jumping ahead to this prompt.

  13. September 22, 2011 8:52 PM

    Beautiful. Very poetic. Lovely imagery.

  14. September 23, 2011 6:00 AM

    It’s amazing how much can be said with so few words… and you worked in ALL of the words from the prompt. You’re too good [and I’m so jealous].

    ~2

  15. September 23, 2011 6:07 AM

    Danni! This is great…really love how you can capture such depth of emotion in so few words…truly talented with your words, my girl…

  16. September 23, 2011 6:19 AM

    Loved the dense knot of emotions packed into this.

  17. September 23, 2011 8:20 AM

    As was said above, great visual. Sometimes, walking away is the best thing you can do!

  18. September 23, 2011 11:46 AM

    Oh so lovely. Very dramatic too πŸ™‚

  19. September 23, 2011 8:41 PM

    This says so much about the one with poison in her words. He’d rather brave the storm than deal with her again. I think I’ve felt like that a few times myself. LOL

  20. September 24, 2011 2:46 AM

    Superb, Danni!

  21. September 24, 2011 9:58 AM

    You did an amazing job with the prompt. Yet again, I’m blown away by your ability to say so much with so few words.

  22. September 24, 2011 2:38 PM

    Ah, this makes me miss those Arizona monsoons. The bruised underbelly of those storm clouds, the purple lightning, that gritty sand that covers everything in its path.

    Of course, the storm you created between the characters in this post is just as intense (and you did it in so few words while incorporating all the words from our prompt!).

    Good job Danni πŸ™‚

  23. September 24, 2011 4:47 PM

    So much beautiful and gut wrenching imagery in so few words, wonderful!

  24. September 25, 2011 9:52 AM

    Nice. Again, I like this shorter theme idea (especially having to use certain words). What a fun challenge. Where did this idea come from? And have you posted it to FridayFlash.org? I’ve just discovered them (but I’m pretty new to this world, so I’m guessing you already have).

    And didn’t I read somewhere that you were in a relationship? After this and the last one I’ve read, I hope for his sake that he doesn’t do anything wrong πŸ™‚

    Paul D. Dail
    http://www.pauldail.com- A horror writer’s not necessarily horrific blog

  25. Chrissey Harrison permalink
    September 27, 2011 3:29 AM

    An excellent, atmospheric little post.
    Flash fiction is not my strong point, but it’s something I want to work on writing more of. I’m going to check out that site you mentioned with the prompts.

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