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Finally

April 26, 2012

Photo by Owl Sisters Photography
Photo Editing by Misty Carey
She bounces on her heels, adrenaline thrumming through her veins. Her eyes jump from the clock to her watch in an endless volley, the time no longer registering in her mind. All she knows is the absence of him. Too many days in an empty house, too many nights in an empty bed, all come down to these final minutes, more unbearable than the months spent alone.

Gravel pops beneath tires; her heart leaps to her throat. She lunges for the door, steps onto the porch, and her breath fails her. Like a mirage he stands beside the car, grin spread across his faceโ€”too real to be a dream, but still too far away to touch.

Sheโ€™s frozen as he climbs the steps without a word. His thumb traces the line of her cheek, and she melts into his arms. Her eyes slip shut as she soaks in the essence of him.

Finally, she is home.

* * *

This is the second story I’ve done for this amazing couple. You can read the first one here: Waiting

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26 Comments leave one →
  1. April 26, 2012 12:36 PM

    Thank you, Danni. ๐Ÿ™‚

    It’s funny how you are able to capture the emotions of two people you have never met. Thank you for writing these pieces (the other last year). Perhaps this will be the last of your long distance relationship series. I can only hope.

    Beautifully written as always. Thank you again.

  2. April 26, 2012 12:42 PM

    You’re very welcome, Misty. It’s the least I can do for the couple I’ve been rooting for for so long. ๐Ÿ™‚ I certainly hope it’s the last long distance flash I get to write for you two.

  3. April 26, 2012 1:13 PM

    Definitely conveys excitement and a storm of emotions, all packaged in very few words!

  4. April 26, 2012 1:51 PM

    Her excitement is almost tangible. Wonderful writing.

  5. April 26, 2012 2:21 PM

    I liked how she didn’t feel like she was home until he was with her, even though he was the one who went away.
    Very well written.

    • April 27, 2012 6:40 AM

      Sometimes it’s harder to be the one left behind. Thanks, Josh.

  6. April 26, 2012 2:54 PM

    Man my heart rate was quickening with the tension you built up through her quivering anticipation. Very nicely done

  7. Angbuf permalink
    April 26, 2012 4:57 PM

    Nicely done Danni!

  8. April 26, 2012 4:58 PM

    as good as the first! Fingers crossed for Misty and Jeff that the waiting ends sooner rather than later ๐Ÿ™‚

  9. April 26, 2012 5:00 PM

    So sweet!

  10. April 26, 2012 6:53 PM

    Aw so sweet!!!

  11. April 27, 2012 12:54 AM

    Lovely work on this, just lovely.

    I think you transposed far away in “…but still too away far to touch.”

    • April 27, 2012 6:39 AM

      Thank you, Tim. And thanks for catching the typo. Corrected! ๐Ÿ™‚

  12. April 27, 2012 3:51 AM

    You capture that emotion of having missed someone so much that without them part of you is empty – such lovely writing Danielle.

  13. April 27, 2012 4:55 AM

    You have a way with words Danni, and I especially like the way you drew on your emotion connection to this couple for inspiration. It left me rooting for both couples, the fictional and the real.

  14. April 27, 2012 5:43 AM

    the last line is a brilliant culmination of this perfectly captured frozen moment. well done, sis.

  15. April 27, 2012 6:11 AM

    Loved it!

  16. April 27, 2012 10:06 AM

    Awesome post as per usual

  17. April 27, 2012 10:40 AM

    Beautiful rendering!

  18. April 27, 2012 11:29 AM

    This is exactly what we (the guy) is hoping is happening on the other end (the girl). Thanks for the warm-fuzzies. ๐Ÿ˜€

  19. April 28, 2012 5:07 PM

    I can’t imagine the agony of a long distance relationship. This captures what I would imagine those reunions feel like amazingly well. Very touching. Now…what comes next…(wink wink)

  20. April 28, 2012 6:43 PM

    Lovely! Inspiring in both prose and emotion.

  21. adampb permalink
    April 30, 2012 2:47 AM

    Beautiful tension and release. Lovely imagery.
    Adam B @revhappiness

  22. April 30, 2012 5:13 AM

    I just so love your writing Danni.. There is something transcendent about your command of the language.. You pack so much meaning into tiny, compact and carefully honed words and phrases. Fantastc!

  23. May 1, 2012 7:03 PM

    Danni this was beautiful – loved the way ‘she melts into his arms’ etc. Very emotive piece.

  24. October 19, 2012 7:52 AM

    Somehow I missed this one the first time around . . . soooo sweet!!

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