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The Murder

May 10, 2012

Image courtesy of Roka Walsh

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A murder waits in the woods. Black eyes peer through the night as shadows wrestle in the leaves below. A scream cut off by the thump of a fist. The flash of a blade. An intake of breath.

Branches stretch bony fingers to stop the inevitable, but it’s too late. They’re on the ground now, her throat clutched in his hands. She claws and hits and fights.

Until she doesn’t.

The leaves are silent and still beneath her and the forest holds its breath waiting for the end. Glassy eyes stare at the bloated bellies of the crows. One lifts its head and caws, marking the time of death as a new soul alights, joining them on the outstretched branch.

The murder is complete.

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25 Comments leave one →
  1. May 10, 2012 12:10 PM

    I enjoyed the clever way you overlapped ‘a murder of crows’ and a murder of a person. Nicely done!

  2. May 10, 2012 1:06 PM

    Well done! A new soul joins the ranks… great image!

  3. May 10, 2012 1:52 PM

    I got chills.

  4. May 10, 2012 2:08 PM

    She claws and hits and fights.

    Until she doesn’t.

    The thud of finality, a life over.

    I too liked the role of the crows, I find them a little bit menacing to start with.

  5. May 10, 2012 3:10 PM

    Delightfully chilling. The artwork really brings it home.

  6. May 10, 2012 3:45 PM

    Dark and delicious.

  7. May 10, 2012 4:43 PM

    Very imaginative, and effective at evoking mood. The last section makes me think of the emptiness left behind by someone’s death, while the crows emphasise the horror of the murder.

  8. May 10, 2012 6:09 PM

    Nice piece, very visual loved this line “The leaves are silent and still beneath her and the forest holds its breath waiting for the end.”

  9. adampb permalink
    May 10, 2012 6:23 PM

    Great blending of the imagery, Danni. Lovely
    Adam B @revhappiness

  10. May 10, 2012 9:54 PM

    Haha, at least you didn’t murder your mom. She’d hate to have all those crows feet.

  11. May 11, 2012 1:09 AM

    Definitely an interesting piece and as usual its very visual in so short a text. Well done Danni and thanks for that.

  12. May 11, 2012 8:35 AM

    Good use of the word ‘murder’. You always say so much with so few words!

  13. May 11, 2012 8:55 AM

    Very atmospheric with great imagery. I liked the “Branches stretch bony fingers” .

  14. Dana permalink
    May 11, 2012 11:01 AM

    Wow, that was effective!!! I’m creeped! Thanks!

  15. May 11, 2012 1:34 PM

    Great like always!

    Loved the ending: “One lifts its head and caws, marking the time of death as a new soul alights, joining them on the outstretched branch.”

  16. May 11, 2012 4:21 PM

    I read this last night but didn’t get to comment. One fantastic linkage of the two meanings of “murder.” Makes me wonder if the murder will seek vengeance…

  17. May 11, 2012 5:44 PM

    Love forest holding its breath imagery. Very amazing, as usual 🙂

  18. charlesallenjr permalink
    May 12, 2012 5:16 AM

    Excellent, as always, Danni! I love the play on the word murder, and you packed so much in to this.

  19. May 12, 2012 5:37 AM

    I really liked the “…her throat clutched in his hands.” line. You often hear of ‘hands around the throat’, but so very rarely the other way around, I think.

    Nice job.

  20. May 12, 2012 8:12 AM

    Love how you’ve given the forest personality. It’s a perfect match for the photo. Loved it!

  21. May 12, 2012 9:01 AM

    As always, a great post, Danni.

  22. May 12, 2012 1:36 PM

    Nice one. I love the imagery.

  23. May 14, 2012 1:58 PM

    I really enjoyed this. Brief, dark, and final.

  24. May 15, 2012 12:09 PM

    Beautiful, intense… and very very chilling.. love the crow imagery. Caaaaww!

  25. May 17, 2012 9:27 AM

    I’m thoroughly disturbed. Well done.

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